A few reminders...

1. Your papers are due tomorrow in class. Any late papers will be excepted but will not be eligible for a re-write. 

2. You may use your late pass on this paper, if you wish. If you choose to do that, you'll turn in your paper by Wednesday.

3. Essays MUST be turned in to turnitin.com by Tuesday at 12:00 a.m. (so that means Monday night).

4. Please bring your IDs tomorrow.

Finally, you may only complete a rewrite if you've been participating (in class and group discussions and through journals). ANY late journals must be completed TONIGHT to receive credit for participation. I will not give you credit for Eyes Journals after tomorrow (not even late credit).

9/27

Author____________________

Editor____________________
Date_________ Per._________

Commentary Editing

MLA Quick Check – you want yes in every category                      Yes              No

Does the paper have a heading in the upper left corner?
Does the paper have a title?
Is the title below the heading and centered on the page?
Does the author indent each new paragraph?
Is the entire paper double-spaced? – no extra spaces
Does each page have a page number in the upper right corner?
Does the author maintain a 12pt font in Times New Roman?
Does the author correctly punctuation each quotation
Does the author correctly cite each quotation?

Read the paper through once without marking it.

On the second reading do the following:

1.  Does the introduction provide context for the passage?  Does the context provide enough  

     information to understand the passage and what is happening around it?

2.  Does the introduction contain a purpose for the passage that covers all aspects of the  

     argument put for in the body paragraphs?  If not, make suggestions to the purpose.

3.  Does the author create topic sentences that incorporate the argument of the paragraph?

4.  Examine the quotations –  underline any place where the author summarizes the quotation   

     instead of analyzing the technique.  Identify any place where the author could enhance the  

     the argument and provide suggestions.

5.  Identify places where the author could remove unessential parts of a quotation.

6.  Identify places where the author needs to develop the transitions between points and provide   

     suggestions.

7.  Examine the organization.  Does the author create a clear progression for the argument? 

     Does the author consistently remain on topic?  Should the author include anything,  

     rearrange, or exclude information?

6.  Does the author cover the entire passage?  If not, where should the author add the information?

7.  Read the paper aloud and mark any awkward sentences or awkward jumps in the  

     progression of the argument.  This includes incomplete and run- on sentences or general

     disorganization. 

8.  Score the paper using the rubric on the back and offer suggestions for any category that   

    didn’t receive a strong score.

9/27

Today we:
EDITED.
HURSTON, YOOOOOO!


Homework:
FINAL DRAFTS DUE MONDAY

Turn in your final drafts to turnitin.com by 12 a.m.

Class ID: 5599395
PW: honeybooboo

9/26

Today in class, we worked on MLA formatting. Then, we worked on cultural connections.

Reminders:
1. Rough Drafts are due TOMORROW. Please give me your draft BEFORE first lunch if you want me to read a paragraph for you.
2. Complete cultural connections documents, including headings for each section and group names need to be emailed as ONE document to Manning by Friday at 2:50 p.m.

9/25

Today in class we did the following:
1. Quotations Practice
2. Checked outlines
3. Began cultural connections

Homework:
COMPLETE ROUGH DRAFTS DUE Thursday!
If you bring your rough draft to me by 9 a.m., I will look at a paragraph of your choice and give you feedback.

Monday, HOORAY!

Today in class:
1. Outline editing. You should get written comments on your outline from four classmates; you should give written comments to four classmates as well. You will get credit just for doing these comments.
2. Outline drafting: based on comments, it is time to start working on revising your outlines.
3. Using quotations hand out.

Homework:
Please have both your original outline (with comments) and a new draft of your outline (it should show revisions based on feedback) in class tomorrow.

ROUGH DRAFTS WILL BE DUE ON THURSDAY. THEY SHOULD BE TYPED AND IN MLA FORMAT. Remember to use line numbers to cite your text. :D

A little MLA information, if you need it (we'll be looking at MLA in class tomorrow as well):
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/13/

9/21

I'm sorry I didn't post this on Friday; I saved it as a draft!!
Remember, your outlines are due tomorrow!!

Here's what I had on the board:
After you find all the techniques and your big mama effect...
Format a thesis.
2 formats:
1. Discuss development, change over the passage and then explain effect.
OR
2. Tell us your primary techniques and then explain effect.

If you choose to do Option 1: here's how you can begin organization:
-Find major changes in the passage. Think about: subject, POV, tone, narrative, character, dialogue to narration, juxtaposition, etc.
-Make each change a new paragraph.
-Create a topic sentence for each paragraph. This topic sentence should be a mini-thesis that builds to your major effect.
-Add your quotations. These should be TECHNIQUES that connect to your TOPIC SENTENCE and, then, to your THESIS.


If you choose to do Option 2:
-Make a paragraph for each technique.
-Give a topic sentence demonstrating how that technique helps develop your technique.
-Add your quotations. THEY SHOULD CONNECT TO YOUR TOPIC SENTENCE AND THEN EFFECT!

REMEMBER TO USE AT LEAST 10 EXAMPLES OF THE TEXT. These examples can be 2 words, 1 word, a group of words, a sentence, whatever.


Here's the example again:

In the passage, Hurston characterizes Janie first as an observer of life, then as an instructor for the lives of others, and, ultimately, the master of her own existence; Hurston demonstrates that Janie must be an active participant in her fate, her horizon, to take control of her soul.

P1: Reassure facts, observes “Now, Pheoby…shine down yo’ throat”.

P2: How to live, advise “It’s uh known fact…fuh theyselves”.

P3: Narrative break, reflection “There was a finished…fell black and headlong down the stairs”.

P4: Movement, room, LIVES “Now, in her room…Thinking”.

P5: Imagery, impermanence of life, death, necessity for control “The day of the gun…Here was peace”.

P6: Horizon, CONTROL “She pulled in…come and see”.